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The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph depicts the value of a country's exports in different categories in 2015 and 2016. The number is measured in billions of dollars.
Overall
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, petroleum
products
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 were exported the most in both 2015 and 2016. Meanwhile, textiles were exported the least in 2015,
whereas
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in
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, in
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 2016, agricultural
products
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 became the subsidiary
one
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apply
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. In 2015,
the
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apply
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petroleum
products
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 stood at $60
billion
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,
then
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 they rose slightly to around $61
billion
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.
Similarly
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, the value of engineering
good
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goods
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 were lower than $60
billion
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 before it went up to the same value as
potrelum
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petroleum
products
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 in 2016 ($61
billion
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).
However
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, gems and jewellery saw a small drop in 2016, from around $42
billion
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 to exactly $40
billion
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. Agricultural
products
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 and textiles experienced an increase in the second year. There
were
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was
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 only a small rise in agricultural
products
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, with a rate of $31
billion
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 in 2016.
Subsequently
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, textiles went from roughly $20
billion
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 to approximately $31
billion
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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