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The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart
illustartes
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illustrates
 the
stastic
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status
 of a
counrty's
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country's
 export in
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 departments during 1 year. ( between 2015 and 2016 )
Overall
, the
stastics
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statistics
 of petroleum products was the highest in
this
 graph. (
This
 number was almost 130
bilion
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billion
dollars
. )
On the other hand
, the lowest part was textiles in 2015 and 2016. The
figure
of
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for
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 petroleum products
just
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was just
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little
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a little
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 over 60
billion
dollars
 in 2015,
this
 number reached
to
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apply
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approximately 65
billion
dollars
 in 2016. The number of engineered goods was just below 60
billion
dollars
 in 2015 and
this
figure
 was just over 60
billion
dollars
 in 2016. The
stastics
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statistics
 germs and jewellery
was
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were
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aprroximately
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approximately
 45
billion
dollars
 in 2015,
this
stastics
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statistics
 decreased to 40
billion
dollars
 in 2016. The
figure
of
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for
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 agricultural products was almost 30
billion
dollars
 in 2015 and
this
figure
 increased slightly and reached
to
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apply
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approxiamately
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approximately
 33
billion
dollars
 in 2016. The
stastics
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statistics
 of textiles
was
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were
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 just over 25
billion
dollars
 in 2015 and
this
figure
 increased to
little
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a little
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 over 30
billion
dollars
 in 2016.
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