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You ordered an item from an online store and it has arrived damaged. Write a letter to the retailer to complain. In the letter: -Explain why you are unhappy; -Request a refund; -Make arrangements to return the damaged item;

#item #store #retailer #-explain #-request #refund #-make #arrangements
Dear Sir/Madam, I'm writing
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ordered
an
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 thing from
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your
an
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online store.
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, it has very bad
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. The product is in unsatisfactory condition. I got for
classmate
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a classmate
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this
 product. My
classmate
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 were
hope
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 for
this
goods
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. I promised to
he
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. I'm refunding for the harmed item. I suggest arranging a pick-up service. I'm buying
this
 thing
other
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 stores. At the same time you making glad I and my classmate.
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, I am calling to
verificatiors
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verification
. They are closing your shop or I am giving
your
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 an online store to the
Sumreme
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Supreme
 Court.
As a result
, they are writing a lot of penalties to you. As soon as
,
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 you must refund
to
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me. It
has
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 very good for you.
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, you can't buy
this goods
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other
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 people and my
the
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best friends. It has just
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. I for too, you for too. Yours sincerely, Khusan Esomurodov
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coherence cohesion
Focus on organizing your ideas more clearly and logically. Each paragraph should introduce a distinct aspect of your situation, developed with relevant details and examples, and conclude smoothly.
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Use a polite and formal tone throughout your letter. Avoid threats and informal language when addressing the recipient, as it undermines the professionalism of your request.
task achievement
Clearly state the problem with your order in the opening paragraph, including what you ordered and why it was unsatisfactory. This sets the context for your complaint effectively.
task achievement
When requesting actions (like a refund or return arrangement), be clear and specific about what you want the recipient to do, and provide necessary information for them to follow up. Avoid making unrealistic demands or threats.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your greeting and closing are appropriate for the letter. Starting with "Dear Sir/Madam," is good, but try to close more formally, such as "Yours faithfully" if you don't know the name of the person you are writing to.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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