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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

In today's Mechanichal era,
traffic
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 congestion is a pervasive issue in large cities worldwide, cities are stuck with vehicles and creating
traffic
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 jams on
roads
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.
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excessive
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an excessive
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 number of automobiles and outdated public
transport
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 system are the main
caused
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 of
this
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 problem and the most viable solution ,
to
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is to
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 improve
communal
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the communal
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transport
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 system and reduce the
jam
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jams
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in
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on
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roads
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.
Firstly
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, I think the prime reason for
jam
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jams
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 is
highly
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 dependency on personal
transport
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. In every household multiple
number of
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apply
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cars,
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and bike
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bike
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bikes
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owned
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 by a family ,
each
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and each
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 individual have their own wheels
hence
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 they do not prefer to use communal transit.
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, another main reason is the inadequate infrastructure in the nation. As we see, Many urban areas have road networks that were designed and built decades ago. As compared to
current
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 volume of
traffic
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these network
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this network
these networks
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 cannot
copup
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cope
 with the present
traffic
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and
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apply
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leading to blocking.
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, in some cities of
the
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Uttarpradesh public
prefer
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prefers
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 going by their own commuter because of
very
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 bad network and broken
roads
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 . A feasible approach to deal with
this
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 issue is in the
hand
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 of
government
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the government
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and
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as well as
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citizens
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the citizens
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. By making strict
law
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laws
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 regarding to number of wheels a family
have
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has
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Moreover
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, Investing in more reliable ,
advance
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advanced
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 and frequent public
transport
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for example
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 buses, trains,
subways
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and subways
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 so , the public will
encourage
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 to use public transportation.Establish park and ride facilities at key locations outside the city
center
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centre
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 encourages commuters to switch from their cars to public
transport
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 for the remainder of their journey
and
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lastly
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 building new
roads
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, make them wide ,
building
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and building
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 new connectivity so, the flow will be light. In conclusion, I believe that making rules
of
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about
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 not having more vehicles,building new connectivity and
by
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apply
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making
improvement
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improvements
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 in public
transport
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 can
undoubtelly
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undoubtedly
 resolve the trouble of excessive
traffic
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 on
roads
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.

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structure
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea and be clearly connected to your overall argument.
cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices (such as consequently, moreover) effectively but not excessively. This helps in connecting ideas more smoothly.
task response
Clearly address all parts of the task. Make sure your essay directly addresses the questions asked, including both causes and solutions for the issue.
language use
Avoid repetition of ideas and phrases. Aim for a variety of sentence structures and vocabulary to make your essay more engaging and demonstrate your language skills.
examples
Provide specific examples to support your points. This makes your arguments more convincing and demonstrates an understanding of the topic.
paragraphing
Consider paragraphing for easier readability. Each new idea or point should start with a new paragraph.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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