The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first pie chart compares the seven different usages of
energy
in the average Australian household. The second pie chart gives information about the amount of Use synonyms
greenhouse
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gas
emission from the result of the different usages of Use synonyms
energy
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apply
in
the first chart.
It is noticeable that heating is by far the biggest usage of Australian household Change preposition
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energy
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while
cooling is the least, Linking Words
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energy
used in water heating would output Use synonyms
most
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the most
greenhouse
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gas
among all the usages.
We can see that Australian people use their Use synonyms
energy
most in heating and water heating, and they have a close percentage, at 42% and 30% respectively. Use synonyms
However
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greenhouse
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gas
coming out from heating(15%) is less than the amount that comes from water heating(32%), only half. The proportion of Use synonyms
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comes
out from refrigeration is close to that of heating, at 14%, Correct pronoun usage
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whereas
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energy
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the energy
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in refrigeration.
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is used
Energy
applied in cooling and lighting is extremely low, with 2% in cooling and 4% in lighting, in the meanwhile, they output the least Use synonyms
greenhouse
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gas
. There is 15% of Use synonyms
energy
used in other appliances, Use synonyms
while
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produces 28% of Linking Words
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gas
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