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The line graph shows the projected population growth of China and India. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the projected population growth of China and India. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
givenline
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given line
 chart illustrates the population growth trend in
india
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India
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 and
china
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China
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 from 2000 and
predict
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 the estimated number of
their
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people in 2050 . As an
overall
 trend, it is obvious that it is predicted for
India
 to grow without any stop or decline but the
chienees
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Chinese
 population will
might
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see a slight decrease till the intended year in the future,
moreover
 despite the number of
indian
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Indian
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 residents
was
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 significantly less than the chinees at the first year of study but they have been growing more rapidly over the study span and probably will be more populated
in
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at
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 the end of prediction. At the
begining
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beginning
 of the graphs
india
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India
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 had 1
billions
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billion
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 people and it is
continously
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continuously
soard
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soared
 to reach 1,6 billion in 2050. Meanwhile
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china had
mor
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more
 than 1.2
billions
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billion
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 at the starting point but its growth rate was
marginally
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 till
arounfd
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around
 the midpoint of the project time duration, afterwards chineess population will
experiense
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experience
 a slight drop gradually to just less than 1.6
billions
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billion
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of
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apply
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people who will live in 2050
which
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apply
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will be 200 millions less than the total poulation of
India
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • projected population growth
  • line graph
  • milestones
  • projections
  • plateau
  • decline
  • rate of growth
  • peak
  • surpass
  • crossover
  • period
  • trend analysis
  • comparative analysis
  • significantly
  • eventually
  • illustrates
  • specific period
  • trends
  • summarizes
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