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The charts below show the usage of coal, oil, hydropower, wind and renewable energy for fuel production, in 2002 and at present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the usage of coal, oil, hydropower, wind and renewable energy for fuel production, in 2002 and at present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These charts depict all the means which were used to produce
energy
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 in two different
period
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 of time.
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, it can be seen that nowadays, the use of renewable sources of
energy
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 has increased compared to the past, particularly the use of the wind.
According to
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 what is shown, fossil
fuel
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fuels
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such
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 as oil and coal
used
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were used
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 mainly for
energy
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 production, as both of them represented 90% of the total production, in 2002.But, these days
although
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 the ratio of the
energy
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 which is produced by oil decreased by 5%, the percentage of using coal to generate
energy
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 increases by 1%. Regarding
the
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apply
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renewable sources of
energy
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, in 2002, they were responsible for approximately 10% of
energy
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 production which
generated
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was generated
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 essentially from Hydropower and
the
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wind by, 8%,
.8
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and .8
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% respectively. At present, they are still used with a minor increase
about
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 5% mainly in the
using
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use
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 of the wind by around 4.2% increase.
To sum up
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, we could say that even though nowadays, the use of oil and coal as a source of fuel
are
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is
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 reduced by about 4% which is
minority
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a minority
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 compared to 2002, they are still the major sources of
energy
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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