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The graph below shows in percentage term the charging patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows in percentage term the charging patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph illustrates the changes in domestic
access
 to
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modern
 technology in homes in the UK over the period of 6 years. Based on the
overall
 data it’s clear that domestic
usage
 of all modern technology significantly went up between 1996 and 2003.
Nonetheless
, the number of
CD
 player
usage
 remained the highest throughout
over
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the period,
while
 Internet
access
 showed an upward trend only in 1998/99. It is apparent from the charts,
there
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that there
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 was a dramatic
rose
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rise
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 in Internet
access
 from 10% to 45%, which
to
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is to
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 be recorded from 1998/99 to 2002/03.
Likewise
, the trend for home
computer
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computers
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 climbed up gradually from 30% in 1996/97 to 50% in 2002/03. The mobile phone started with the lowest percentage at 18%
usage
 and fluctuated wildly;
however
, the trend
was
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went up to just over 70%.
Similarly
,
CD
 players
also
 gained about 23%, from 60% to 83% domestic
usage
.
A
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 glance at the graph, phone
usage
 surpassed home computers in 1998/99. In the beginning, the proportion of
CD
 players was twice
higher
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as high
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than
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as
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 that of Internet
access
. But the mobile phone takes account of modern equipment as an important part and nearly to the
CD
 players.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words access, usage, cd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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