A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: Explain what you are currently doing Describe your suitability for this area of work Say when you can attend an interview.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in response to your advertisement which was searching for waiters for your restaurant. I have read your classified advertisement
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the college street's wall and would like to get more information.
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I am studying at "Cambridge" college where is located in front of your workplace. I spent a lot of money
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my needs, I guess you will understand
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students' expenses. And I demand a lot of money for myself from my parents,
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it is difficult
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my parents to provide
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enough as I want. So I decided to apply for a job which is suitable for my time. I believe that my job will
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your demand because I have some
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for
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works
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such
as a waiter or assistant.
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, my new flat is near
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and I can easily arrive for work within
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minutes
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walks
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. I am available for the interview after my lesson that time is nearly afternoon. I would appreciate
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you
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me as soon as possible. If you need any information, you can contact me on my mobile phone which is: 6015932 . I look forward to hearing from you!
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faithfully, Nozigul
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coherence cohesion
You should structure your letter more clearly by using introductory phrases, clear paragraph separations, and transitions between paragraphs to improve logic and flow. Consider starting with an introduction where you mention the job you are applying for and how you found the advertisement.
coherence cohesion
Although you have used greeting and closing correctly, ensure that the closing phrase matches the level of formality throughout the letter. 'Your faithfully' is usually used when the name of the person is not known, and it should be 'Yours faithfully'.
coherence cohesion
Try to develop each paragraph around a single idea: 1) Your current situation and reason for applying, 2) Your suitability and previous experience, 3) Your availability for an interview. This will improve the clarity and effectiveness of your message.
task achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the task. You have mentioned your current activity and your suitability, but more specific details and examples could strengthen your application. Additionally, being more specific about when you can attend an interview would be helpful.
task achievement
Consider adopting a more formal writing tone appropriate for a job application. Avoid using colloquial expressions and maintain consistent formality throughout the letter. Using formal expressions and correct punctuation will enhance your professionalism.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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