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The given pie charts shows the proportion of British students able yo use languages other than english. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The given pie charts shows the proportion of British students able yo use languages other than english. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The
Two
 pie charts display a comparison of British
students
 who were able to speak in other languages
beside
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 English between 2000 and 2010. In general, it can be seen that the highest percentages of Britain
students
 were capable
to speak
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 Spanish only in 2000 and 2010.
Otherwise
, the lowest was for
two
 other unspecified languages and German accents in 2000, but in 2010 there were three categories at the same proportions. The total number of British
students
 who were able to speak Spanish only was 30% in 2000; no other
languanges
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languages
 placed in second rank with a total of 20%,
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 by
the
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another languages
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 and French only (15% each). The
two
 remaining categories
were
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contributed
for
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 about 10% of the total percentages.
On the other hand
, Spanish was the
popular
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languange
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language
 in 2010 calculated
of
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35%
in
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of
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total
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the total
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 population. The total number of
students
 who were able to
spoke
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speak
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 another
languanges
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language
languages
 was 20%;
two
 other
languanges
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languages
 contributed
for
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 15%. Three other accents had a similar number with 10% of each category.
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