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The chart A illustrates the percentage of films screened in both the UK and Australia in 2006, while the chart B illustrates the cinema admissions in the UK and Australia between 1976 to 2006.

The chart A illustrates the percentage of films screened in both the UK and Australia in 2006, while the chart B illustrates the cinema admissions in the UK and Australia between 1976 to 2006.
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 A illustrates the percentage of
films
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 screened in
both
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 the
UK
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 and
Australia
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 in 2006,
while
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 B illustrates the cinema admissions in the
UK
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 and
Australia
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 between 1976 to 2006.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that US
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 were the most shown
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 compared to other
films
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 in
both
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 the
UK
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 and
Australia
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,
while
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 cinema admissions in
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 countries experienced increasing trends between 1976 to 2006. Regarding
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 A, the number of
films
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 presented in the
UK
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 was higher compared to
Australia
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 except for other
films
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. The US
films
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 screened stood at just below 80
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percent
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 in the
UK
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 and at approximately 65
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percent
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per cent
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 in
Australia
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.
UK
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 and Australian
films
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 have similar trends in
both
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 countries with
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films
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presented
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 a
slight
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 higher at approximately 21
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percent
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. Other
films
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 show different trends at approximately 25
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percent
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 of
films
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 screened in
Australia
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 and not reached
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10
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percent
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 in the
UK
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. In terms of
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 B, the cinema admissions started at around 105
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 in the
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 in 1975. The
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 increased to approximately 125
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 before dropping to 50
million
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 in 1984.
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, the
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 started to increase significantly by 120
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 in 2003.
This
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 is followed by a slight decrease in the next 2 years and ended at around 150
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 in 2005. The
graph
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 in
Australia
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 started at around 40
million
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 in 1975 and it is lower than the data in the
UK
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.
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, the
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 started to increase gradually and reached around 40
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 in 1983.
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, it declined by 10
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 in 1985 and rose back to 40
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 in 1990. The
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 started to increase steadily and ended at approximately 80
million
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 in 2005.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, films, both, uk, australia, percent, million, graph with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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