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The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050.

The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050.
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The line graph illustrates the growth of the
population
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 (in billions) in
India
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 and
China
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 over a 50-year period between 2000 and 2050.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that the number of people in
China
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 will remain unchanged, after a gradual increase,
while
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 the figure for
India
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 is planning to have an upward trend throughout the period.
Additionally
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, the
population
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 of
China
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 was
initially
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 higher,
however
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,
India
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's
population
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 overtook the first place in the
last
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 2 decades. Looking at the details, the figure for
China
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 started at under 1.3
billion
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 people and has risen continuously since 2000. The number is currently above 1.4
billion
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,
however
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, experts predict that the number will have fallen negligibly by 2050. In terms of
India
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, the figure started at 1
billion
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,
then
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 soared up until today.
India
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 currently has approximately 1.4
billion
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 people, before growing upwards steadily
according to
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 the expectations of experts. In 2030, the
population
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 of both countries is expected to be identical in 2030.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, india, china, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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