The diagram below show the production and processing of milk and dairy products for commercial sale

The diagram below show the production and processing of milk and dairy products for commercial sale
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Contained in the diagram is information pertaining to the steps of making
milk
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-based products for commercial. From an observational perspective, it is apparent that the process is fairly complex which commences with extracting
milk
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from
cow
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cows
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and culminates with products ready to use. The initial phase focuses on taking
milk
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out
the
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of the
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cows. The procedure starts with letting cows
eating
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eat
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fress
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fresh
grass before putting them into a machine
which
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apply
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used
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for milking twice a day.
Following
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this
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step, the
milk
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is
transfered
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transferred
to
a
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refrigeration storage where manufacturers
keeps
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the
milk
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prior to transporting
to
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it to
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Dairy. The
phases
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phase
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ends when the
milk
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goes through
a
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various different types of
machine
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machines
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to be pasteurized. Moving on to the latter stage of delivering
milk
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to whole sellers. Once fresh
milk
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has been pasteurized, it is packaged in the bottles. Alternatively,
milk
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can be processed into many types of products
such
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as cheese, cream and butter.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk with synonyms.
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