The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008

The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008
The graph illustrates the share of the UK population who ate fruit and
vegetable
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vegetables
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five times per day between 2001 and 2008.
Overall
, there was an uptrend over the entire period for all categories; the figures for children and men increased sharply,
while
the share of women went up moderately. The figure for children remained the lowest all over the time frame; it started at roughly 12% in 2001, remained constant until 2003 and
then
grew
with
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a steady rate to about 25% in 2007. The share of men had a similar trend, but in 2001 it was around 17%, had no changes over
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2 years and
then
it started to
increment
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rapidly to nearly 27% in 2007. Both segments of
population
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the population
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suffered from a slight decline over
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year in the graph.
In contrast
, the percentage of women who ate five
portion
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portions
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of fruit and vegetables in 2001 was the highest, among other categories. Over time, it
incremented
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increased
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gradually between 2001 and 2006, from roughly 21% to about 34%,
while
in the
last
two years it declined by almost 3%, remaining the highest figure in 2008.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • portion
  • consumption
  • trend
  • significant increase/decrease
  • stability
  • public health campaign
  • awareness
  • socio-economic factors
  • health implications
  • daily intake
  • nutritional habits
  • dietary guidelines
  • public policy
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