The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
There is a
system
for
treatment
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the treatment
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of
rain
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rainwater
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water
in an Australian Town. It is a very practical
system
which starts with Rainwater falling down and being collected by a drain of each house
of
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the village. When the
water
is collected, it passes
througth
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through
a
water
filter. After that, the
water
goes to a very big storage which is connected with a
system
of
water
treatment.
Then
, when the
water
arrives
to
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this
special storage, it is treated with chemicals designed
for cleaning
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to clean
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the
water
of
bacterias
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bacteria
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.
Finally
, when the
proccess
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process
is done, the
water
is sent to the same houses across pipelines, ready
for being
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to be
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drunk. It is a
system
based on the savings of natural resources and how people can take advantage of the weather and the natural conditions, so if you compare
this
system
with
regular
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a regular
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system
, benefits are very significant for societies who are looking
for
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to
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save money or societies who do not have the facility of have drinking
water
into their houses.
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