The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the line graph depicts global
water
consumption
in 3 different sectors between 1900 and 2000,
whereas
the table compares specific data about
water
consumption
in Brazil and Congo in 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,
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agriculture by
for
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far
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was the biggest contributor to
water
use
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to other sources. By looking at
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the chart’s
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chart’s
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details, we can observe that in the early
1900
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1900s
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industrial and domestic use of
water
was
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significantly
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significant
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less than
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agricultural
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agriculture
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consumption
of As shown in the line chart, agriculture has exhibited stable growth from 500 km3 in 1900 to over 1000 km3 in 1950. Not surprisingly, during a period from 1950 to
2000
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2000,
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this
figure experienced a massive growth by around 2000 KM3.
Additionally
, domestic and
water
use
of
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the
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were
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near zero,
however
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however,
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by
end
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the end
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of
this
time
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time,
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the figure
reach
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reached
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about 100km3 and 600km3, respectively. By looking at the table number,
it is clear that
Brazil with
population
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of 176 million people consumed 50
this
as Congo with
population
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a population
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5
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of 5
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million people.
Finally
, Brazilian per capita
water
consumption
stood at 8 m3
compare
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compared
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with 359 m3 of Congo. In conclusion,
this
char
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chart
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clearly shows how
water
utilization has
been
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changed, and
give
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gives
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us an example to compare
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issue in two certain
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parts
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of the world.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, km with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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