the graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patters of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feaures and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the variation in local
acess
to modern technology in Correct your spelling
access
household
in the UK in percentage valves.
Fix the agreement mistake
households
Overall
, during the study period of 1996 to 2003, access to all three contemporary technical devices, CD player, mobile phones
and home
computers increased ,with a dramatic rose
in mobile Correct your spelling
rise
phones
. Other than that , internet acess
Correct your spelling
access
also
followed the same trend as mobile phones
form
1998.
In detail, Correct your spelling
from
home
computer and CD player usage increased gradually in the study periog
with approximately Correct your spelling
period
20
% hike in Correct article usage
a 20
its'
access. Correct your spelling
its
However
mobile phones
Fix the agreement mistake
phone
acess
increased significantly Correct your spelling
access
in
nearly 50% during the same time with little fluctuations in the middle but with Change preposition
by
a
upward trend.
In comparison mobile Change the article
an
phones
were used only slightly less than 20% in 1996/1997,and
Correct word choice
apply
whereas
home
computers were utilized by nearly 30% in the same year.However
in 2002/Add a comma
However,
2003
nearly 70% had domestic Add a comma
2003,
acess
to mobile Correct your spelling
access
phones
while
nearly 55% had a home
computer.Submitted by dinaka0001 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words acess, phones, home with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
▼