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the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the
UK
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 graduate and postgraduate
students
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 who did not go to
full time
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full-time
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work
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 after graduating in 2008.
Overall
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, the number of
the
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apply
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graduate and postgraduate
students
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 who did voluntary
work
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 and unemployment
were
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was
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 lower compared to the
students
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 who did part-time
work
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 and
further
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study
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. The figure
of
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for
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 the
UK
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 graduates shows most of them focus on
further
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study
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 with a total of 29,655
students
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.
Whereas
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, the
students
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 who did part-time
work
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 and
unemployment
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unemployed
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 were quite similar with 17,735 and 16,235 respectively. Voluntary
work
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,
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apply
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were
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was
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 the lowest among the
other
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others
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 with 3500
students
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.
On the other hand
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, the
UK
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 postgraduates almost had the same percentage
with
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as
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 the
UK
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 graduates
in
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apply
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. Most of them went
to
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on to
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 take
further
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study
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studies
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 with a total of 2,725
students
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.
However
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, the
students
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 who had part-time
work
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 after they graduated were under the
students
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 who took
further
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study
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 with a total of 2,535
students
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. Whilst, unemployment and voluntary
work
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 were the lowest among the
other
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others
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, students, work, study with synonyms.
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