The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part time Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part time

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The
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provided
picture shows the comparison between
the
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apply
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male
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males
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and
female
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females
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in
further
education
were
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who were
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working
as
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apply
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a
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apply
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full
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full-time
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time
and
part
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part-time
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time
during the three different types of
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periods
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in Britain.
Overall
, there are flactuation for people who work
as apart
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part-time
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time
and
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an upward
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trend for
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those who
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working as
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work
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a
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apply
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full
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full-time
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time
. It is clearly seen that the
the
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full
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full-time
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time
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job
had increased significantly from the left to right side of the graph.
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, in the middle
1970
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of 1970
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, the trend
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declined to less than a
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hundred
. Starting at the first period of the recorded in 1970 to 1990, the percentage
were
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surged considerably, and dropped down in the
yaer
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year
of 1970. The next
year
was
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rebounded back to above
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200% and
continuous
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continued
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to almost 300 in the period of 1990. In terms of people who work as a
part
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part-time
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time
jod
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job
were much more popular than the full
time
. The percentage stood at a very high which
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was
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1000%
at
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in
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the first
year
. The fluctuation
had
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went down to over 800% in the next
year
and came a little bit back in 1990, and they
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kept
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repeating it for another three years. Ultimately the
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last
year
, they reached
to
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a peak at almost 1200%.
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