The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part time Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part time Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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provied
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picture shows the comparison between
the
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male
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males

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and
female
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females

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in
further
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education
were
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who were

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working
as
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a
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full
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full-time

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time
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and
part
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part-time

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time
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during the three different types of
period
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periods

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in Britain.
Overall
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, there are flactuation for people who work
as apart
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part-time

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time
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and
upward
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trend for
whom
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those who

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working as
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work

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a
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full
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full-time

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time
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. It is clearly seen that the
the
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full
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full-time

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time
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jod
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job

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had increased significantly from the left to right side of the graph.
Nevertheless
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, in the middle
1970
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of 1970

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, the trend
had
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declined to less than a
hundread
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hundred

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. Starting at the first period of the recorded in 1970 to 1990, the percentage
were
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surged considerably, and dropped down in the
yaer
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year

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of 1970. The next
year
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was
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rebounded back to above
over
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200% and
continuous
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continued

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to almost 300 in the period of 1990. In terms of people who work as a
part
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part-time

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time
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jod
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job

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were much more popular than the full
time
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. The percentage stood at a very high which
is
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was

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1000%
at
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in

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the first
year
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. The fluctuation
had
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went down to over 800% in the next
year
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and came a little bit back in 1990, and they
keep
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kept

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repeating it for another three years. Ultimately the
lasy
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last

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year
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, they reached
to
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a peak at almost 1200%.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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