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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line graph
ilustrates
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illustrates
 the rate of energy
usage
 in
USA
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the USA
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 from 1980 to 2030.
Overall
, Petrol and Oil will
remained
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remain
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at
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apply
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the most used energy
in
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at
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 the end of the given period.
Meanwhie
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Meanwhile
 coal and natural
gas
 switched its position as the second and third
sources
 of
power
. Nuclear, solar or wind, and
also
power
 seemed insignificant in number in comparison with previous
kind
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kinds
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 of
sources
.
To begin
 with, petrol and oil
usage
 in 1980 was 35
quadrillions
 and made
as
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apply
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the highest in the line graph. It experienced fluctuation
after
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from
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 1980 until 1995, since
then
 it
was
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has
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 gradually
increase
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increased
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 before 2025 and
expected
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is expected
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 to reach to peak in 2030 with 45
quadrillions
usage
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of usage
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. Unlike those
sources
 of
power
, natural
gas
 and oil swap
its
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their
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 rank in the quantity of
usage
. Natural
gas
 was the second most used energy in 1980 with 20
quadrillions
 , and coal was below it
in
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with
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 around 15
quadrillions
.
However
, in 2030 it was predicted
than
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that
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 the proportion of people
that
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who
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 will utilize coal higher than those who are using natural
gas
.
On the other hand
, there is a group of infamous
sources
 of
power
. That group consisted of Nuclear, Solar or Wind, and Hydropower. Those energies started with the same point in the graph, around 3
quadrillions
.
While
nucleas
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nuclear
nucleus
 and solar or wind
power
 utilisation
is
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are
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 projected to be higher from the starting point,
hydprower
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hydropower
 will
suffered
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suffer
be suffered
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 from a downfall in 2030.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, gas, sources, power, quadrillions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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