The charts bellow show teh percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts bellow show teh percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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pie charts show the consumption of
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water
in six different nations. The information is given in the percentage and it is split into 3 groups, which are
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Industrial ,
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Agriculture
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, and
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Domestic.
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had been used a lot for Agriculture and use less for the domestic.
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popular among people in 4 communities roughly more than 80%. Despite the
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trend in South America being almost 3 quarters, they still less than Africa, Central Asia, and South East Asia.
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one quarter in North America and Europe, but they both
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a lot for industrial functions. As the figure shows the Domestice did not need a large number of
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at all, America and Europe were accepted.
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