The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts give information about the
proportion
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of typical meals in
term
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of
sodium
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, saturated fats and added
sugar
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.
Overall
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,
breakfast
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contains the least
proportion
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of
sodium
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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.
Furthermore
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,
dinner
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contains the most
proportion
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of
sodium
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and saturated fat,
while
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for added
sugar
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,
snacks
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take up the largest
proportion
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.
Firstly
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, the largest
proportion
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of
sodium
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and saturated fat
linked
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to
dinner
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about 43% and 37% respectively. In terms of
sodium
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,
breakfast
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and
snacks
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consumed the least accounting for 14%. And the percentage of
sodium
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in lunch is 29% in the second rank.
Average
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percentage of saturated fat is quite similar to
sodium
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.
For instance
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,
dinner
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accounts for the largest part at 37%, followed by lunch ,
snacks
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and
breakfast
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at 26%, 21%,
16
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and 16
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% respectively. what's more, different from
information
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the information
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mentioned above, the biggest part of added
sugar
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is
snacks
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at about 42%
while
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dinner
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is the second one at 23%, which
taking
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up the biggest
proportion
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in other types of nutrients. The following two typical meals
is
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are
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lunch and
breakfast
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accounting for 19% and 16%. All in all, each kind of
meals
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meal
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takes up at least 14% of these three types of nutrients. We couldn’t eat too much
while
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it may be unhealthy for us to
consumes
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consume
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too much of these nutrients.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, sodium, sugar, breakfast, dinner, snacks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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