The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts give information about the
proportion
of typical meals in
term
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of
sodium
, saturated fats and added
sugar
.
Overall
,
breakfast
contains the least
proportion
of
sodium
, saturated fat and added
sugar
.
Furthermore
,
dinner
contains the most
proportion
of
sodium
and saturated fat,
while
for added
sugar
,
snacks
take up the largest
proportion
.
Firstly
, the largest
proportion
of
sodium
and saturated fat
linked
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to
dinner
about 43% and 37% respectively. In terms of
sodium
,
breakfast
and
snacks
consumed the least accounting for 14%. And the percentage of
sodium
in lunch is 29% in the second rank.
Average
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The average
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percentage of saturated fat is quite similar to
sodium
.
For instance
,
dinner
accounts for the largest part at 37%, followed by lunch ,
snacks
and
breakfast
at 26%, 21%,
16
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% respectively. what's more, different from
information
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the information
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mentioned above, the biggest part of added
sugar
is
snacks
at about 42%
while
dinner
is the second one at 23%, which
taking
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up the biggest
proportion
in other types of nutrients. The following two typical meals
is
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are
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lunch and
breakfast
accounting for 19% and 16%. All in all, each kind of
meals
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meal
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takes up at least 14% of these three types of nutrients. We couldn’t eat too much
while
it may be unhealthy for us to
consumes
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consume
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too much of these nutrients.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, sodium, sugar, breakfast, dinner, snacks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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