The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
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the precentage
precentage
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percentage
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different areas
such
as rural, towns and cities. the most striking difirence betwen
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difference between
two
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the two
of
outsiders in rural areas, back in 1995 there were more Change preposition
in
forigners
in rural parts by Correct your spelling
foreigners
procentege
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percentage
then
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than
australian
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Australian
while
nowadays this
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has almoust
almoust
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almost
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only
procent
of Correct your spelling
per cent
forigners
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foreigners
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live
overall
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little
then
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than
procent
of Correct your spelling
per cent
forigners
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foreigners
procent
of locals lived in cities and towns, recently it jumped to more Correct your spelling
per cent
then
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than
procent
of Correct your spelling
per cent
forigners
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foreigners
almoust
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almost
procent
of locals. Correct your spelling
per cent
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, population
of small towns Add an article
the population
also
seen a decline. It declined Add a missing verb
has also
2 fold
in both given categories. Correct your spelling
2fold
therefore
, the only condtantly
rising social group are Correct your spelling
constantly
constant
cities
population, in both cases it Fix the agreement mistake
city
risen
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rose
has risen
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apply
somwhere
around 20 Correct your spelling
somewhere
procent
. From 50 to 70 and from 70 to more Correct your spelling
per cent
then
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than
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respectively
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