The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Thailand who visited four different places in Bangkok. Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Thailand who visited four different places in Bangkok.

Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented line chart illustrates the proportion of
visitors
who visited four various areas of Thailand between 2015 and 2017.
Overall
, it can be seen that in 2015 and 2016, the total number of tourists was almost higher than in the other two years.
Additionally
, the lowest number of
visitors
belonged to the year 2017, except for the
Wax
museum
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, which accounted for the lowest
visitors
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in 2015. In detail, in 2014, the number of
visitors
of
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to
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the Bangkok
zoo
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Zoo
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and See
world
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World
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were 50% and 70 per cent respectively,
while
in the following years, these numbers declined by almost a quarter.
Moreover
, the
Wax
museum
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Museum
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and the
China town
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Chinatown
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visitors
increased over a year and reached
to
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80% and almost 70% respectively in 2015.
Furthermore
, in 2016, the
Wax
museum
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Museum
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and the China town consisted of about 85% and hundred per cent respectively,
whereas
in 2017, the statistic of people who went to all mentioned places as tourists decreased to 20% or less, except for the
Wax
museum
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Museum
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which experienced approximately 70 per cent of tourists.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, wax, museum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.

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