One of your friends wants to apply for a job at a summer school camp as a sports trainer. Write a letter to the camp manager to recommend your friend. In your letter: say how well you know your friend describe the qualifications and experience that your friend has explain why your friend would be suitable for this job.
Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing
this
letter to recommend my friend for a job at a summer school camp as a sports trainer that is
required for this
season.And I hope you will understand me.
Firstly
, I would like to say how well I know my friend. Nazar is my childhood friend and we studied in the same school also
. He was so interested in football, so after finishing the
school he decided to be one of the local football club's Correct article usage
apply
player
which's called-"Mash'al"
Fix the agreement mistake
players
In addition
to this
, Nazar has a really good experience in training younger students because he has worked as a football trainer for the last
3 months. He didn't see enough career growth experience with his current employer and that's why he would like to switch his job.
I believe Nazar is the best choice for this
position as he has a lot of experience in his previous role. Thank you for attention
and consideration and I look forward to your response.
Yours faithfully
FeruzabonuCorrect pronoun usage
your attention
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Task Achievement
To enhance your score in task achievement, try providing more specific examples and details about your friend's qualifications and experiences. Mentioning specific accomplishments or relevant certifications can strengthen the recommendation.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea, but also try to connect these ideas more smoothly to create a more cohesive letter. Transitional phrases between paragraphs could improve the letter’s flow.
Tone and Register
Your greeting and closing are well done, but you could improve the letter's professionalism by avoiding phrases like 'And I hope you will understand me.' which can seem informal or unclear in this context.