The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Thailand who visited four different places in Bangkok. Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Thailand who visited four different places in Bangkok.

Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart compares four different places in Bangkok from 2014 to 2017 about the percentage of tourists who visited Thailand.
Overall
, the proportion of China towns fluctuated dramatically,
while
Sea World and Bangkok Zoo declined in
this
period.
Firstly
, China town increased sharply from 20% to 100%, the highest digit in 2016.
However
, in 2017, it decreased to merely 10%, even lower than the initial.
Subsequently
, Bangkok Zoo decreased to less than 10% in 2017 and became the area where the less visitors arrived
although
there was 50% in 2014.
In addition
, the Wax Museum grew to its peak at 80% in 2016,
while
it plummeted to 70% the next year. Notably, the Wax Museum became the most popular attraction in 2017, despite a decrease from 2016 to 2017.
On the contrary
, Sea World was 70% which was the most popular in the initial
,
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and
then
fluctuated to 20% in the following years.
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