The two bar charts give information about the proportion of obesity in boys and girs between the ages of 12 and 19 by nationality in the United States for the two decades (2010 and 2014)
The two given pictures show the comparison between the percentage of boys and girls who suffered from obesity between the ages of 12 and 19, particularly for certain races in the United States (
non-hispanic
white, Correct your spelling
non-Hispanic
non-hispanic
black, and Correct your spelling
non-Hispanic
hispanic
) in 2004 and 2014. In summary, it is evident that the total obesity cases grew from 2004 to 2014, showing that Change the capitalization
Hispanic
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hispanic
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Hispanic
male
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males
non-
hispanic
black Change the capitalization
Hispanic
female
were Fix the agreement mistake
females
dominated
,
To be specific, In 2004, boys who Replace the word
dominant
have
body weight Wrong verb form
had
problem
were only at about 12%. Unfortunately, it got worse a decade later, resulting in Fix the agreement mistake
problems
hispanian
as the highest addition at 14%, followed by dark and white coloured Correct your spelling
Hispanics
non hispanian
at 9% and 5% respectively.
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non-Hispanics
Otherwise
, it seems a little different for girls' case
who were dominated by Fix the agreement mistake
cases
non-hispanic
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non-Hispanic
black
at 16% and continued to jump to 29%. Fix the agreement mistake
blacks
Additionally
, non-hispanic
white (9%) and Correct your spelling
non-Hispanic
hispanic
(12%) Change the capitalization
Hispanic
increase
at Wrong verb form
increased
average
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an average
5,5
% in 2014.Change preposition
of 5,5
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