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The chart below shows the percentage of river water in UK rivers that is classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of river water in UK rivers that is classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph below illustrates
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 for the rates of river
water
 which was
regard
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 as having good chemical quality
water
 in the UK from 1990 to 2002.
Overall
,
while
 almost
regions
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all regions
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also
 experienced an increase after over 10 years, the opposite was seen in
the
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Wales. Noticeably, the lowest belonged to England during the period of time. Starting with 92%, the rate of good elemental quality
water
 in
Nothern
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Northern
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 Ireland
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 down by 7% in 1992 before rising significantly to over 95%,
surpassed
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 Scotland in the following 2 years.
However
, after exhibiting a dramatic
raise
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rise
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 in the end to 98%,
this
 figure
witness
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 a drop to under 85%, and became the
least
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lowest
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 in 1996.
Additionally
, accounting for 82%, the proportion of good chemical conditions
water
river
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rivers
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 in England, which was the minority, less
15
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than 15
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% than the highest. Over the first 8 years,
this
 figure just saw a little change around 2%, before growing sharply to 90% and maintaining at that level until 2002.
On the other hand
, Wales and Scotland made up 97% and 95% respectively, during
the
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nearly a century, these
figure
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were
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almost
remain
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 unchanged, just have only
1
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a 1
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% decrease in 1998
of
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 Scotland. From 1999,
whereas
 Scotland’s rate
climb
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 moderately by 3% and
stablized
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stabilized
stabilised
 that
figures
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to
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 the end of
given
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 time, Wales’s proportion witnessed a gradual fall to 93%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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