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The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of monolingual, bilingual, and
polygot
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polyglot
 British
students
 at
one
 university in England in the years 2000 and 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the
per cent
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percentage
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 of native
speaker
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speakers
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 and
the
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French
students
 underwent decreases during a decade.
However
, there were rises in the number of
another
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 language users and the Spanish language ranked in the highest segment within ten years at
one
 university. In detail, the English
students
 constituted
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the second rank after Spanish users(30%) with a fifth of
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 amounts at the beginning of the period,
however
, it was halved in 2010.
In addition
, the fraction of
the
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French
students
 decreased by 5% and made up
one
 in ten
at the end
 of the period. Regarding increases, the percentage of
the
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another
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other
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 language and Spanish users increased by 5% and accounted for more than
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half collectively (20% and 35% respectively) in 2010.
By contrast
, the German and polyglot
students
' number remained steady and comprised
one
 in ten.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • additional languages
  • proficiency
  • decade
  • trends in language learning
  • globalization
  • cultural shifts
  • inferred
  • shifted
  • popularity
  • decrease/increase in speakers
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