The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the Canadian
labor’s
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rates in main industries between 1580 to 2020. On the whole, the percentages of people who work for
Manufucturing
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manufacturing
and agriculture/fishing have decreased.
In contrast
,
workforce
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the workforce
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in service has increased. One of the
noticiable
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noticeable
points to note is that there is
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decrease in the proportion of people who engage in agriculture and fishing. It has 22% in 1850, but only 1% in 2020. And the rate of people who work
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manufacuturing
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manufacturing
has
also
decreased. Specifically, the rate
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down from
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36% to
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9%. the percentage of
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in energy/water was 3% in 2018, and
then
slightly down to 1%. Interestingly, agriculture and fishing were more popular than energy/water in 1850, but they
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the same percentages in 2020.
On the other hand
, there
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an increase in the rate of
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working for services and construction, which
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at 33% and at 5% in 1850
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but rose to
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81% and 8% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce composition
  • significant shift
  • increase/decrease in percentage
  • service industries
  • manufacturing
  • construction
  • noteworthy trends
  • tech industry
  • economic evolution
  • technological evolution
  • main features
  • comparisons
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