You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phone the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter - describe the problem with the equipment explain what happened when you phoned the shop say what you would like the manager to do.

Dear Sir The purpose of inscribing
this
missive is to show my dissatisfaction caused by
an equipment
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equipment
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that
i
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bought from your store
last
weekend on March 10, 2024. It was an air fryer of
Gourmia
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the Gourmia
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company. It
is
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not
working
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properly
from
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since
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my first use; as it overcooked the tenders when
i
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put those to get cooked with the specific timer.
Moreover
; yesterday it sparked and not cooking anything now. It stopped working at all. I contacted your store by phone but nobody could offer me any sensible answer. The shift manager told me that it
is
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not the fault of
shop
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the shop
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at all
and
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apply
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there is a lengthy procedure to replace
an equipment
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equipment
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and the store
do
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does
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not have any refund policy.
Besides
that, without explaining the procedure of replacement she ended the phone call, which
i
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found very unprofessional.
Nevertheless
,
i
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hope you will replace the item or I am entitled to a partial refund
in addition
to an apology for the inconvenience caused. I
had
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attached
the
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a
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copy of
warranty
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the warranty
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receipt with the letter. I look forward to
receive
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a prompt reply! Yours Faithfully Raman
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Task Response
To improve the task response, ensure you clearly address all parts of the prompt. It seems you've covered the necessary points, but consider expanding on the description of the equipment problem for clarity, and perhaps suggest a clear resolution that you seek, such as a specific date by which you would like the issue resolved or a direct request for a refund or exchange.
Coherence & Cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, consider using more transitional phrases between paragraphs and within paragraphs for smoother transitions. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph maintains a clear focus. You might also benefit from opening with a more direct introduction to the problem and concluding with a stronger, more direct statement of your desired outcome.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • equipment malfunction
  • customer service
  • warranty claim
  • attempted resolution
  • unsatisfactory response
  • replacement request
  • repair services
  • refund procedure
  • swift resolution
  • consumer rights
  • loyalty to the shop
  • managerial intervention
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