You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phone the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter - describe the problem with the equipment explain what happened when you phoned the shop say what you would like the manager to do.
Dear Sir
The purpose of inscribing
this
missive is to show my dissatisfaction caused by an equipment
that Remove the article
equipment
a piece of equipment
i
bought from your store Change the capitalization
I
last
weekend on March 10, 2024. It was an air fryer of Gourmia
company. It Correct article usage
the Gourmia
is
not Verb problem
has
working
properly Wrong verb form
worked
from
my first use; as it overcooked the tenders when Change preposition
since
i
put those to get cooked with the specific timer. Change the capitalization
I
Moreover
; yesterday it sparked and not cooking anything now. It stopped working at all.
I contacted your store by phone but nobody could offer me any sensible answer. The shift manager told me that it is
not the fault of Wrong verb form
was
shop
at all Add an article
the shop
a shop
and
there is a lengthy procedure to replace Correct word choice
apply
an equipment
and the store Remove the article
equipment
a piece of equipment
do
not have any refund policy. Correct subject-verb agreement
does
Besides
that, without explaining the procedure of replacement she ended the phone call, which i
found very unprofessional.
Change the capitalization
I
Nevertheless
, i
hope you will replace the item or I am entitled to a partial refund Change the capitalization
I
in addition
to an apology for the inconvenience caused. I had
attached Wrong verb form
have
the
copy of Correct article usage
a
warranty
receipt with the letter.
I look forward to Correct article usage
the warranty
receive
a prompt reply!
Yours Faithfully
RamanChange the verb form
receiving
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Task Response
To improve the task response, ensure you clearly address all parts of the prompt. It seems you've covered the necessary points, but consider expanding on the description of the equipment problem for clarity, and perhaps suggest a clear resolution that you seek, such as a specific date by which you would like the issue resolved or a direct request for a refund or exchange.
Coherence & Cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, consider using more transitional phrases between paragraphs and within paragraphs for smoother transitions. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph maintains a clear focus. You might also benefit from opening with a more direct introduction to the problem and concluding with a stronger, more direct statement of your desired outcome.