You and your friend have both been accepted to a study abroad programme in Paris France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter : Congratulate him/her for also being accepted Ask him/her if she would like to be your roommate Discuss possible activities that the two of you could do together Write at least 150 words. You do not need to write any addresses Begin your letter as follow: Dear,

Dear Mitali, How are you? It's been a
while
hasn't it
.
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The
last
time
have
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been final exams. I can't express my feelings of happiness after hearing the news of your selection in
same
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institute
thats
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of mine in Paris . I'm proud that you got selected that's all because of your
hardwork
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hard work
. As you were not a book
catterpiller
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caterpillar
in school it might have been difficult for you to attain
this
position. Anyway, I'm congratulating you from the core of my heart. One of the other
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i
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was thinking
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to
book
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the
appartment
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apartment
appointment
for staying. If you
dont
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don't
mind
will
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you like to join me as a
roomate
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roommate
there? As we both are from
same
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community and
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each other
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childhood, it will be easier to adjust. I heard it's a beautiful tourist attraction we might plan to visit the Ifel
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and other historical buildings. We can study together and even find
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easily. I
will
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love to learn new dishes there we
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are going to
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join cooking classes
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and
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regular gym
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schedule
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. would be fun! Speak to you soon, Aksha
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coherence cohesion
To enhance your letter's coherence and cohesion, focus on smooth transitions between paragraphs. Though the letter discusses several points, making clearer connections and using transition words (
coherence cohesion
Ensure a single, focused idea per paragraph. Each paragraph should clearly address one aspect of the letter's purpose (congratulation, roommate proposal, activity planning). This will improve clarity and flow.
task achievement
Your completion of the task is commendable, as you address all required points. For further improvement, consider providing more detail or examples about the proposed activities and how they would be enjoyable or beneficial to both of you.
task achievement
Adopt a more consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter. Though mostly suitable, some phrases may seem a bit informal or too casual for this context. Aim for a warm, friendly tone that maintains a level of formality appropriate for written correspondence.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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