The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The figures illustrate the life cycle of a species of fish, which is known
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salmon
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. There are three main steps to grow up, namely
fry
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, smolt and
adult
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salmon
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.
Overall
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, the
salmon
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eggs become 3 different categories during
grow
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up. They spent about 10 years to be
adult
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salmon
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.
Firstly
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, its eggs become
fry
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for 5-6 months. They stay at
river
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the river
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with fast blowing for 4 years. Interestingly, when it is
fry
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, its length
was
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just 3-8 cm.
Then
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, it is changed to smolt.
Secondly
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, it lives around the sea for 5 years, which is the longest time to process. Its length increases slightly from 3 to 15 cm during the "
fry
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to smolt" change.
Finally
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, it becomes
adult
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salmon
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, which is the
last
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process.
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,
this
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process is going on,
while
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the creatures are bringing up sharply to 70-76 cm. Once the fish matures and is now an
adult
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salmon
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, it produces eggs, and the period continues.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, fry, adult with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • life cycle
  • species
  • freshwater
  • marine habitat
  • larvae
  • fry
  • smolts
  • spawn
  • anadromous
  • survival rates
  • migrate/migration
  • vulnerability
  • adaptation
  • maturation
  • environmental conditions
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