The diagram belows shows the stages in recycling aluminum drinks cans.

The diagram belows shows the stages in recycling aluminum drinks cans.
The provided flowchart illustrates how
aluminum
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drinks
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cans
are recycled.
Overall
, the process involves ten different steps, beginning with waste collection by a truck and ending with
cans
being passed through a rolling machine to make the final products. The total process takes six weeks to complete.
Firstly
, used drinks
cans
are collected as waste and deposited in a factory. After that, water is used to wash
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off used
cans
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the third step,
cans
are crushed
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into
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in to
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into
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blocks of
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the aluminum
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aluminum
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fragment
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,
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and then
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then
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they are processed in a separate plant, where
colors
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are erased chemically.
Subsequently
, heat is used to turn
aluminum
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blocks into liquid, which is poured into a
mold
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to produce uniformly shaped
cans
. The moulded products are
then
weighed and passed through a rolling machine to produce perfect cylinder
cans
.
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