The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2008. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make com-parisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2008. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make com-parisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates various shifts in birth rates per 1000 women by different age groups in England between 1973 and 2008.
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, those aged 25-29 had the highest
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of births
while
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those aged 40 and over had the lowest. The highest
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of children were born by women from 25 to 29 as the figure stood at 140 in 1973.
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it experienced a dynamic fluctuation between approximately 120 and 130 until 2008. Starting from above 120 in 1973, the
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of children born by 20-25 year olds constantly declined to nearly 90 in 2008. The next higher age group was 30-35-year-olds who demonstrated a mild increase from 70 in 1973 to over 80 in 2008.
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, the birth rate of women under 20 dropped sharply from 60 to 40 during the same period of time.
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, there was an opposite trend as the
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of births of 35-39-year-olds rose from 40 to 60 over the 35 years, surpassing that of people under 20 in 1990.
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, those who were 40 and over had the lowest rate of birth as they only had 20 births in 1973, which hit the bottom at 10 in 2008.
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