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Writing Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the avarage percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words.

Writing Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the avarage percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words.
#minutes #show #avarage #percentages #meals #three #nutrients #summarise #information #features #comparisons
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According to
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 the charts, three types of nutrients
contain
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are contained
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 in typical meals,
sodium
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, saturated fat and added sugar. The charts above
,
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apply
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describes
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describe
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 the
avarage
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average
percentage
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 of
sodium
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, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in
USA
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the USA
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.
Firstly
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, The typical meals of
sodium
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 nutrients have a higher
percentage
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 when consumed
in
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at
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dinner
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 than
breakfast
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at breakfast
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,
lunch
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 and snacks.
Additionally
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, when
sodium
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 consumed in
lunch
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have
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has
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 the second highest
in
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apply
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percentage
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 following snacks and
dinner
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 equal in value.
Secondly
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, saturated fats have a higher
percentage
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 consumed
in
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at
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dinner
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 following
lunch
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 as the second highest.
In addition
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, saturated fats nutrients consumed in snacks as the third highest and the lowest
is
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in
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 breakfast.
Lastly
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, consuming added sugar
in
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at
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lunch
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have
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has
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the
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a
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 higher
percentage
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 than
in
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at
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dinner
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.
Therefore
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, making it the
dinner
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 as the second highest in
percentage
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,
following
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followed
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 the
lunch
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 as the third highest and breakfast as the lowest.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, percentage, dinner, lunch with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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