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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph and pie chart
illustrates
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 information about the relation between age and crime and types of crime in the UK for the previous
year
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the biggest number of
crimes
 were committed by people between the ages of 16 and 24.
In addition
, the major type of illegal activities for
past
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the past
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year
 were violent
crimes
 and the lowest proportion was for problems with
the
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apply
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public order. First of all, it can be seen that children start to engage in illegal activities at
age
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the age
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 of 12 with around 5
tens
 of thousand violations.
Subsequently
, at 16, with a dramatic rise in numbers, they reached 70
tens
 of thousands. The peak of
crimes
 for the past
year
 was 80
tens
of
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thousands
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thousand
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 and was made by
20
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20-year-old
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year
 old individuals, followed by 60
tens
 of thousands
crimes
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of crimes
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 people at 24 and a sharp decline afterwards. About
one half
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one-half
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 of the
crimes
 committed
last
year
was
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were
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 violent
crimes
 at 46%, followed by drug and property illegal activities, at 22% and 23% respectively. Only 9% of the violations were public order.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, crimes, tens with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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