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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate how the wave-energy
machinary
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machinery
 generates power
along with
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 its location options for the installation.
Overall
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, the
machine
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 perceives
two
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 sources of energy to produce electricity with
two
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 preferences
area
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areas
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 to install it. Basically, the installed wave-energy
machine
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 receives power sources from
two
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 directions, upper and lower. On the upper side, the cold air will flow through a designated entrance, which later causes the turbine to move and produces hot wind as the
outcomes
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that is
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 driven outside the
machine
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. Concurrently, the
machine
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also
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 receives energy from the wave beneath it. The strong current that successfully reaches the underwater chamber causes the level of collected water
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rises
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rise
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 until it creates a strong hot air flow that will move the turbine, which produces cold air
that is
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 released back to the underwater chamber. Regarding its location, there are
two
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 options to install the
machine
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.
First,
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it can be placed close to the seashore, with a low installation cost.
However
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, it will not receive a strong current that produces low output in the end. If one wants to produce
a high outcomes
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high outcomes
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 of
electricty
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electricity
,
then
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 it should be put far from the seashore, with;
nevertheless
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, a pricey cost of
installment
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instalment
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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