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The chart below compares the percentages of tourism dollars spent in different economic sectors in two time periods. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below compares the percentages of tourism dollars spent in different economic sectors in two time periods. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.
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 data demonstrated a comparison of the percentages of tourism dollars spent in various economic sectors in two time periods.
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, it is obvious that the tourism sector has a significant impact on employment situations of different industries
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 as agriculture, food, and related parts. At a glance, it indicates the percentage changes in both the reduction and growth of U.S. employment in two time periods. The remarkable increase from 11.8 million jobs at food services, eating, and drinking places reached 21.1 million, approximately 2 times. But there is a considerable decrease in other sectors so that they
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 off by roughly half compared to the previous statistics.
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, farms that placed 2.6
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 of U.S. employment dropped to 1.3
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, it can be seen that food and beverage stores changed from 3.3
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 to 1.7
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, it witnessed the same reduction
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 other industries.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentages
  • economic sectors
  • distinct time periods
  • priority
  • focus
  • increase in tourism spending
  • percentage rise
  • luxury tourism
  • technological advancements
  • decreased
  • tourist preferences
  • economic downturns
  • efficiency
  • reduce costs
  • stable
  • share
  • consistent value
  • demand
  • key trends
  • experience-focused sectors
  • decline
  • traditional hospitality
  • evolving
  • tourism spending behavior
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