The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town and cites closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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The online shopping platform is the most easiest and

convinient

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convenient

way to purchase some

products

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and we can get that on our

door steps

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doorsteps

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, they provide some kind of

offfers

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offers

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get that pay later options that should be a very big deal for

people's

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people

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apart that we

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have a local

shop

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's on our town and cites in that

shop

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also

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we can get

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the

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latest

products

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with

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convinient

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convenient

way and

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easy refund etc

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statement

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can'

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agree with

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, because when we purchase or order some

product

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from

onlile

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online

shopping

platform's

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we don'

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know that

product

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receving

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receiving

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good condition, because

some times

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sometimes

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they will

sent

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send

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the wrong

product

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or a damaged

product

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and we

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need to panic about that courier if they damaged the

product

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or not .They

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took

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apply

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2 to 5 days of delivery time. In online shopping platforms there

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are

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lot of scams going on we don'

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know

that

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whether

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online shopping

dealer

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dealers

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have

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apply

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real time

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shops or not some people are just

sale

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selling

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the

product

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apply

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online but they dont have

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shop

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for

this

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time if we

sent

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send

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the money or ordering an

products

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from that dealer we can'

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get our money back either the onlile shopping platforms

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not be able to get that or prevent from

this

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scams.

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if we order

some

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expencive

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expensive

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sent

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send

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you

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cheep

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cheap

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products

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product

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then

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you can'

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even return the

product

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according to

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statement

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statement,

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the local

shopes

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shoppes

shops

are not closing by the online shopping platform because they

also

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need

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vendor's

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vendor

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for fast delivery

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local places , if

ther

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there

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apply

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any problem or any

damage's

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on that

product

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we can replace the

product

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on the spot

otherwise

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we can get the refund instantly on local

shop

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's and we can'

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scamed

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scammed

scared

and our personal data

also

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not goes

anyware

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anywhere

in my

openion

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opinion

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prefer the local shopping is the best.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

332 words

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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town and cites closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

It is sometimes suggested that primary school children should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals. What are the advantages and disadvantages? Do you think advantage of this outweigh the disadvantage?

Some people prefer to travel around town by car, while others prefer public transit such as bus, train, or subway. Discuss both these positions and give your own opinion.

Some think dangerous extreme sports such as skydiving and rock climbing should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. Why do so many people want to study in English? Why is English such an important international language? Give reasons for your answer.