The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town and cites closing. Do you agree or disagree?
The online shopping platform is the most easiest and
convinient
way to purchase some Correct your spelling
convenient
products
and we can get that on our door steps
, they provide some kind of Correct your spelling
doorsteps
offfers
and we Correct your spelling
offers
also
get that pay later options that should be a very big deal for people's
apart that we Unnecessary verb
people
also
have a local shop
's on our town and cites in that shop
also
we can get a
latest Change the article
the
products
with an
Change the article
a
convinient
way and Correct your spelling
convenient
a
easy refund etcChange the article
an
..
So for Replace the punctuation
.
...
this
statementAdd a comma
,
i
can'Change the capitalization
I
t
agree with this
, because when we purchase or order some product
from onlile
shopping Correct your spelling
online
platform's
we don'Change noun form
platforms
t
know that product
receving
Correct your spelling
receiving
an
good condition, because Correct your spelling
in
some times
they will Correct your spelling
sometimes
sent
the wrong Change the verb form
send
be sent
product
or a damaged product
and we also
need to panic about that courier if they damaged the product
or not .They also
took an
2 to 5 days of delivery time.
In online shopping platforms there Correct article usage
apply
is
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are
an
lot of scams going on we don'Change the article
a
t
know that
online shopping Correct word choice
whether
dealer
have Fix the agreement mistake
dealers
an
Correct article usage
apply
real time
shops or not some people are just Add a hyphen
real-time
sale
the Replace the word
selling
product
on
online but they dont have Change preposition
apply
an
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a
shop
for this
time if we sent
the money or ordering an Wrong verb form
send
products
from that dealer we can't
get our money back either the onlile shopping platforms also
not be able to get that or prevent from this
scams.Example
if we order Change preposition
For example
some
Correct determiner usage
an
expencive
watch, they will Correct your spelling
expensive
sent
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send
be sent
you
an Correct pronoun usage
us
cheep
Correct your spelling
cheap
products
, Fix the agreement mistake
product
then
you can't
even return the product
.
according to
my statement
the local Add a comma
statement,
shopes
are not closing by the online shopping platform because they Correct your spelling
shoppes
shops
also
need an
Change the article
a
vendor's
for fast delivery Change noun form
vendor
on
local places , if Change preposition
to
ther
is Correct your spelling
there
an
any problem or any Remove the article
apply
damage's
on that Unnecessary verb
damage
product
we can replace the product
on the spot otherwise
we can get the refund instantly on local shop
's and we can't
be scamed
and our personal data Correct your spelling
scammed
scared
also
not goes anyware
in my Correct your spelling
anywhere
openion
Correct your spelling
opinion
i
prefer the local shopping is the best.Change the capitalization
I
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