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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of export in 2016 compared to 2015

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of export in 2016 compared to 2015
#value #country #exports #categories #percentage #change #category #export
The bar chart illustrates
amount
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 of money,
earning
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 from 5 different
products
transportion
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transported
, during 2015-2016. The table demonstrates value changes in each output during the same period.
Overall
, all
products
were
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increased in 2016
expect
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except
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 gems and jewellery, the only production
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that exprienced
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exprienced
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experienced
 a decrease in
the
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value.
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Furthermore
, the
textlies
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textiles
 had a process in the worth and
also
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 of exportation in 2016, more than other categories. According
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 numbers
are
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shown by the
barchart
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bar chart
,
the
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petroleum
products
was
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 the top-most among other production in both
2015
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the 2015
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 and 2016 years at about 60 and 63
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,
respectivaly
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respectively
. The second place belongs to the engineered goods with about 57% in 2015 and more than 60% in 2016.
Lastly
, The
textiles
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 exportation has the lowest ratio in 2015 and 2016 about 25% and 32%,
respectivaly
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respectively
. In terms of the table, the highest value changes
is belong
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 to the textiles with an upward 15.24
percent
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per cent
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while
,
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 the agricultural
products
 had just
0.81
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a 0.81
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%
inscrease
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increase
.
In addition
, the only manufacturers with a
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is
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 the gems and
jewerlley
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jewellery
 at 5.18
percent
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per cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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