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The main purpose of university is to provide graduate with the knowledge and skills needed for students to get a good job.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#purpose #university #graduate #skills #students #job
Recently, there
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 been so many cases regarding unemployed graduates
due to
lower
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 number of
job
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 that
currently
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 available.
Moreover
,
student
has
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 not
been
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utilized with proper skills and
knowledge
 after they
finished
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 their
study
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studies
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 un the university. related to
this
 topic, I
personaly
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personally
 think that universities should
taught
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 their
student
 which is their role is
product
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a product
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 of
knowledge
 to be able to compete within
professional
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the professional
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 realm.
furthermore
, lecturer
play
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 a big role
on subsidized
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 their
student
 with sufficient skills that
relevant
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with
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 the current market.
Started
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 from their decision
weather
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whether
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 they
wanted
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 to continue their study or
becoming
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a professionals
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a professional
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, they should be familiar with things that matter
such
 as basic
knowledge
 of their fields. Let's take an example architecture
student
, after their study
was
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 done they should at least
mastering
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master
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 a few skills like sketching,
space
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and space
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 programming, and understand
about
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basic building structure
knowledge
.
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