the chart shows the percentage of males and females who were overweight in Australia from 1980 and 2010
The provided graph compares the proportion of men and women who suffered from obesity in Australia in four
years
. Unit is measured in percentage
.
Overall
, it is clear that
the percentage
of males dominated in all given years
. On the other hand
, the percentage
of females who suffered from obesity gradually rose and in the last
two years
peaked approximately the same . Additionally
, the proportion of overweighed people in 1980 remained the lowest point.
According to
the table, the figure for females in 1980 showed the minimum per cent at just above 30%, that
had modestly gone up to almost Correct pronoun usage
which
a
half. In the Correct article usage
apply
last
two years
(2000 and 2010) the percentage
of overweight among
women came top Change preposition
apply
in
the table at approximately 52%.
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of
In contrast
, there was 40% of overweighed men in the first given year, it gradually rose to just 50% in the next period. However
, the figure for males who were overweight climbed to the highest point at about 65% in 2000. Whereas
, it slightly declined by 5 per cent in the last
year.Submitted by ina1_95 on
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