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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

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 era of competition, many
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 like to spend their life in a foreign
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. Some
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 are fond of foreign cultures
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 some
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 migrate to study and some
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 shift
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 internal company transfer.
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 essay will discuss both the advantages and
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 of
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 trend. Living in a foreign
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 teaches many
people
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 a new aspect of life. If we talk about students, they learn how to cook, time management and other soft skills which will be useful for them throughout their journey. There are many
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 who never travelled
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 public transport in their home
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 but after migrating to a foreign
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, they commute daily
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 public transport.
People
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 learn to adapt to foreign cultures to survive in these countries which is a huge advantage that teaches them how different
people
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 think and live. On the other side, there are many
disadvantages
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 of living in a foreign
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. One of the biggest
drawback
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 is homesickness.
People
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 generally feel homesick after migrating to a foreign
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. Because there is no one to take care of them in these countries, some
people
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 choose bad roads which are harmful
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 their health and life. The parents who send their children to study in a foreign
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 are always in a constant state of worry because they live thousands of miles away from their children. In conclusion, there are many
disadvantages
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 and advantages of
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 trend. It totally depends on a person's purpose of migration that they will face advantages or
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, migrating as a student is more difficult than migrating as a worker.
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introduction conclusion present
Clearly introduce the topic and state your view or intention in the introduction. This helps the reader understand your position from the beginning.
logical structure
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supported main points
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complete response
Ensure your essay responds to all parts of the task. Present a balanced discussion of both advantages and disadvantages, and ensure you address how these different aspects compare to each other.
clear comprehensive ideas
Clarify your ideas by developing them more fully. Provide more analysis and insight into how and why certain advantages and disadvantages exist and how they impact individuals.
relevant specific examples
Use specific examples to illustrate your points. These examples should be detailed and relevant to the topic. They prove your points and make your argument more convincing.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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