The diagrams below show the life cycle of a specie of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relavant.
the diagrams show the how
raising up
and life cycle of a species of large Verb problem
rise
fish
called the salmon
.
Add a missing verb
is.
overall
, fry is the smallest type of fish
, it is only 3-8 cm. Smolt is middle
one type of. Adult Correct article usage
the middle
salmon
is the biggest one
type of Correct pronoun usage
apply
fish
. Fish
’s life cycle is very slow. Between fry to adult salmon
spend approximately five years.
Looking at the details, the first stage is salmon
eggs raise
up Correct your spelling
rise
then
become small stones. Approximately 5-6 months Correct word choice
and then
fish
is slow moving in upper
river. The second stage is approximately four years,fry is fast flowing in Add an article
the upper
lower
river. The third stage is Add an article
the lower
fish
Rephrase
when fish
raise
up Correct your spelling
rise
then
they changed
Wrong verb form
change
which
become big.Correct word choice
and
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, salmon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slow" was used 2 times.
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