The chart below shows the value of one countries exports in various categories during 2015 in 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015
The chart illustrates the export value of one country between 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentages of each
product
in 2015 and 2016.
Overall
, there were some differences between the first and second years
. The highest products achieved
by petroleum products Wrong verb form
are produced
while
textiles are the lowest in both years
. Moreover
, the agriculture
Replace the word
agricultural
product
was stagnant in both years
. However
, the highest percentages
Change the noun form
percentage
chance
in value is textiles Correct your spelling
change
while
gems and jewellery decrease slightly.
To begin
with, petroleum products earned $60 billion
in first
year and Change the article
the first
increase
slightly up to 3% around $62 Wrong verb form
increased
billion
. Afterwards, engineered goods gained less than $60 billion
in 2015 and $61 billion
in 2016 which
the percentage in values Correct your spelling
with
increase
8.5%. Moreover
, textile
earned $25 Fix the agreement mistake
textiles
billion
in first
year and Change the article
the first
increase
significantly Wrong verb form
increased
around
$30 Change preposition
by around
billion
ranked
up 15.24%.
The gems and jewellery Wrong verb form
ranking
product
gained $42 billion
in 2015 and $40 billion
in 2016 with decrease
ratio of 5.18%. Correct article usage
a decrease
In contrast
, agricultural product
Fix the agreement mistake
products
relative
stable Change the word
relatively
in
$30 Change preposition
at
billion
in both years
increase
slightly only in
0.81%.Change preposition
by
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