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The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph illustrates the
the
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figure of people who visited the museum in various seasons in
UK
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the UK
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of
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in
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 2005.
Overall
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, the rate of people who went to the building in the summer is more than
winter
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in winter
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.
Farther more
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Furthermore
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, most people visited the place at 12 pm.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Average number of visitors
  • Museum
  • Summer
  • Winter
  • Trends
  • Peaks
  • Lows
  • Month-by-month analysis
  • Increases
  • Decreases
  • Stability
  • Attendance
  • Comparisons
  • Disparity
  • Similarity
  • Concluding figures
  • Key findings
  • Notable
  • Surprising
  • Expected outcomes
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