bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The provided bar chart shows the
percentage
of Australian
men
and women
in different age
groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Overall
, Almost in every group
age
, the percentage
of Australian
women
exceeds that of Australian
Men
who did regular physical activities
. Only in the age
group
of 15 to 24 years
old, is the percentage
of Australian
Men
who did the same activities
more dominant than Australian
Women
.
With the Assumption that each of the age
categories has the same population
, 45 to 54-year-old Australian
Women
have the greatest percentage
with 53.3%. besides
, the lowest population
is the age
group
of 35 to 40 years
old Australian
Men
with 39.5%.
In many productive age
groups which are 25 to 34 years
old, 35 to 44 years
old, and 45 to 54 years
old, the percentage
of Australian
men
did less regular physical activities
than the average population
. the average percentage
is approximately 47%, in the other hand each group
only has 42.2% for the 25 to 34 years
old group
, 39.5% for the 35 to 44 years
old group
, and 43.1% for the 45 to 54 years
old group
.
In 2010, The bar chart also
indicated the older the age
category of Australian
women
, the higher the population
percentage
who did regular physical activities
. The term does not incorporate the oldest category, which is the category of 65 and over.
In Conclusion, this
bar chart illustrates, that in 2010 Australian
Women
did more regular physical activities
in many age
categories than Australian
men
. The other highlight point is in the productive age
group
, Australian
men
did regular physical activities
below the average of all populations. It might be affected by many factors which are working hours rate, type of occupation, and people's behavior
in every Change the spelling
behaviour
group
of age
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