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The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the proportion of gender among faculty
members
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 in a university in the year 2012.
Overall
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, engineering courses are overpowered by male
members
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while
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 females rule education courses.
On the other hand
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, medicine has a neutral environment. Data revealed that men dominated the engineering department with the ratio of 85 males to 15 females followed by the science and business sectors which
similarly
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 have more than 60 faculty and the least exhibited in education courses where women outnumbered men by a quarter. Pertaining to females, noticeable the highest staff
members
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 were found in the education major with about 65
members
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 followed by Art subjects with more than 50 women.
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, medicine has a ratio of men and women equally at approximately 45
members
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words members with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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