The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
A quick glance at the diagrams
show
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shows
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information about how many stages were lived of
large
Correct article usage
a large
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fish
called the
salmon
.
Overall
, there are three types
fish
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of fish
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such
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apply
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as
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apply
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the smallest one is fry
and
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apply
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it
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which
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is approximately 3-8 cm
of
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in
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body. Next is smolt
fish
and their body about 12-15 cm. The biggest
fish
is
salmon
,
salmon
’s body is 70-76 cm. In terms of explaining
process
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the process
a process
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,
upper
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the upper
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river is
slow
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slow-moving
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moving
Verb problem
apply
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and there are some reeds. Under the reeds, some stones with
salmon
eggs and they are approximately 5-6 months. After 5-6 months eggs become fries, and the habitat changes to a fast-flowing lower river. Fry lives there for approximately 4 years,
then
it grows and becomes smolt. With regards to the diagram, smolts live in the open sea for 5 years,
then
they become adult
salmon
and they leave their eggs in the upper river. It can be seen that how the life cycle of
salmon
continues.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, salmon with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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